Anyone willing to give some criticism (LONG)?

I think it's definitely a good start, and it could benefit from some revision (but all stories do, after all). I just wanted to point out that the character wakes up surprised that she has cried in her sleep, and later she admits that she has been having "memorable" nightmares. Furthermore, she doesn't know initially what made her cry in the beginning, but later she is able to recall every detail of her nightmare. You don't have to take this to heart, but my suggestion would be to include a scene from the nightmare right before Kristin wakes Lucy up, then have her have one of those "it was just a dream" thoughts before explaining to Kristin why she was crying.